What do you think about this Idea of my added character to twilight (Jasmin Cullen)?

I do have to admit I find your story quite interesting, but at times find it hard to get through with all the errors. I give you credit for your diligence in writing and look forward to more from you, and hopefully in time you will improve in your grammar and punctuation. No offense intended, hopefully none taken, hope I have helped you. OMG, almost forgot to give you an answer your new character seems to fit in well.